Yumi
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Post by Yumi on Jul 28, 2008 12:23:03 GMT -5
This is some random poem I wrote late at night.
Blinded by darkness
Blinded by night
Looking for answers
but I'm lost tonight
I've never felt like this
I've got to find my way
Where is the end?
It seems so far away
I hope I will find the light
What will it take?
I want to be free from the dark
When will day break?
Blinded by darkness
Blinded by night
Looking for answers
But I'm lost tonight
I'm giving up the fight
I'm giving in to the darkness
It's overtaking me
I can feel it's caress
It's crawling up my throat
Its grasp growing tighter
I finally feel free
My spirit soaring higher
Blinded by darkness
Blinded by night
No need for answers
'Cause I'm free tonight
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 28, 2008 14:16:32 GMT -5
It's crawling up my throat It's grasp growing tighter I finally feel free My spirit soaring higher You don't use an apostrophe on "its" unless it is a contraction of "it is" or "it has". |
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Yumi
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Post by Yumi on Jul 28, 2008 14:33:48 GMT -5
XDDD Okay. I'll fix it. XDDD
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 28, 2008 15:39:07 GMT -5
It's crawling up my throat Its' grasp growing tighter I finally feel free My spirit soaring higher You only use "it's" if it is a contraction of "it is" or "it has". "Its'" is never acceptable, unless "It" is a proper noun or something. |
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Yumi
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Post by Yumi on Jul 28, 2008 16:02:35 GMT -5
You do know that the "It" is Darkness?
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 28, 2008 16:43:09 GMT -5
Yes, but that doesn't matter. You can only use "Its'" if you, say, invent something called an "It", you have more than one, and they possess something. "Those are the Its' objects" would be one such example.
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Post by killerinstinct on Jul 28, 2008 16:53:21 GMT -5
It's crawling up my throat Its' grasp growing tighter I finally feel free My spirit soaring higher I think Daryl means there's an extra apostrophe after its, which makes the sentence wrong. |
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 28, 2008 17:45:22 GMT -5
No, she added that apostrophe after my first comment, making it more wrong (See my first quote).
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Yumi
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Post by Yumi on Jul 28, 2008 19:07:03 GMT -5
Okay, what irritates me is, why couldn't you have just said that I have to change "It's" to "Its"? It would have made life a whole lot easier and I wouldn't be this irritated of a small mistake.
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Post by Bitchy Grammar Queen on Jul 28, 2008 19:12:29 GMT -5
Way to go, Daryl.
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Post by shadowdeath on Jul 28, 2008 19:21:45 GMT -5
Daryl's an ass like that.
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 28, 2008 19:23:21 GMT -5
But if I'd just said that, you wouldn't know why, and nothing would have been learned!
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Post by killerinstinct on Jul 29, 2008 4:45:41 GMT -5
Daryl's bad at being a grammar nazi.
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 29, 2008 11:51:41 GMT -5
Kinda's bad at judging Grammar Nazis.
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Yumi
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Post by Yumi on Jul 30, 2008 8:34:12 GMT -5
I'm gonna be a Sophmore! Once you told me, I would have remembered it and made note of it. >.<
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Post by daryl1730 on Jul 30, 2008 23:38:50 GMT -5
The correct spelling is "sophomore".
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Post by Yumi on Jul 31, 2008 16:37:42 GMT -5
GAH! You irritate me!
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Post by killerinstinct on Jul 31, 2008 16:38:29 GMT -5
Give her a break, Daryl. That was probably just a typo.
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Post by Griffin on Jul 31, 2008 18:24:31 GMT -5
Daryl's just being Daryl. It's instinct.
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Post by shadowdeath on Jul 31, 2008 23:45:57 GMT -5
Not killer instinct though.
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Post by Griffin on Aug 1, 2008 0:05:37 GMT -5
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Post by killerinstinct on Aug 1, 2008 1:00:27 GMT -5
Not killer instinct though. You and your puns. |
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Post by Wulfi on Aug 1, 2008 3:34:47 GMT -5
...You know what? I'm actually gonna say something about the poem, not the grammar of it.
I liked it, Shika. =) It reminds me of the depressions I used to go through a few months ago. I found this piece of writing lovely.
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Post by Yumi on Aug 13, 2008 19:31:23 GMT -5
Thank you very much, Wulfi. Finally someone said something relating to my poem and not just to correct it. -_-
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Post by Luther on Aug 14, 2008 22:35:37 GMT -5
The correct spelling is "sophomore". Punctuation goes in quotes plz |
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Post by daryl1730 on Aug 14, 2008 23:11:31 GMT -5
Not in every case.
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Post by Bitchy Grammar Queen on Jan 13, 2009 16:11:01 GMT -5
Periods and commas always go in quotation marks.
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